I mean, I don't have much to say yet other than I'm enjoying the story, I feel like it has legs, and I'm glad I signed on for the ride especially as I'm an aspiring writer myself. It feels wrong to critique anything in particular because I know it's a first draft that you're literally editing in real time. The only thing I have right now is that it ultimately should start a lot more slowly. Maybe having the school feel more real until the point where you realize it's floating in this liminal imagination space? I'm reading "Strange the Dreamer" right now and some people have grumbled about the slow start but it wouldn't work at all without the slow start. Indeed it still moves too quickly, as far as I'm concerned.
(Since I'm here: you did mention that some other genre writing by you was floating around on the Internet. I would be interested in reading it.)
This YA series adapted for Netflix costars very famous actors: Charlize Theron, Kerry Washington, Laurence Fishburne, and Michelle Yeoh. It’s uh something.
Wait what? Who? Me? Uh...
I mean, I don't have much to say yet other than I'm enjoying the story, I feel like it has legs, and I'm glad I signed on for the ride especially as I'm an aspiring writer myself. It feels wrong to critique anything in particular because I know it's a first draft that you're literally editing in real time. The only thing I have right now is that it ultimately should start a lot more slowly. Maybe having the school feel more real until the point where you realize it's floating in this liminal imagination space? I'm reading "Strange the Dreamer" right now and some people have grumbled about the slow start but it wouldn't work at all without the slow start. Indeed it still moves too quickly, as far as I'm concerned.
(Since I'm here: you did mention that some other genre writing by you was floating around on the Internet. I would be interested in reading it.)
This YA series adapted for Netflix costars very famous actors: Charlize Theron, Kerry Washington, Laurence Fishburne, and Michelle Yeoh. It’s uh something.
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_School_for_Good_and_Evil